Tales of Shalon: ch1

Author :: IanDredDBrony

Mature Themes :: There's some blood, but nothing horrible.

The Link :: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/45639/Tales-of-Shalon

Genre :: Adventure

Critique requested :: Basic spelling, punctuation and format run through,
Grammar and internal consistency/consistency with the show, Style,
characterisation, themes and plot (not that kind)

Anything Else :: I've gotten some critique and was recommended here.

i'm new to the fan fic idea and it REALLY shows, I'm trying, but there's
some stuff that just doesn't add up very well. I could use the assistance,
but understand if I don't get any. People have lives, and are meant to live
them.

Currently the story is on FIMfiction and Deviantart.

I don't have a true plan currently. I'm pretty much working with things as
I'm going (it doesn't seem to be working that well). The discription pretty
much covers it, but if you need anything let me know.

Number Of Distinct Docs Submitted :: 1