ALRIGHT! Sorry that I have so much to do. Homework and all, but it won't take long! I'll get to your fic in a day or so. Meanwhile, someone else's gotta help ya. I'll see if anyone can.
I think you should explain more, how much approx. would be considered a wall of text. And what ya mean by "show, don't tell." I was really confused when I first heard that phrase. XD In fact, I'm still not 100% sure what it means.
Sorry, earlier before didn't have time to convert it to GDocs. I'll toss the links here (comments enabled), and sorry again.
ReplyDeletehttps://docs.google.com/document/d/13BKG-MGJGqwxcUR6Iz5_-FEqIyf0jEYUS-ALfGtlZAE/edit (Chapter 1)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1eRHxgzzIpUyobuw6NFkU286GFhmp3FgV7lDu_Dpcnw0/edit (Chapter 2)
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Etm28P30doQzu4SDNYUcdFSF59UUoxF5Tkax_xEb-4I/edit (Chapter 3)
ALRIGHT! Sorry that I have so much to do. Homework and all, but it won't take long! I'll get to your fic in a day or so. Meanwhile, someone else's gotta help ya. I'll see if anyone can.
DeleteAlso:
(Chapter 1)
(Chapter 2)
(Chapter 3)
Compliticated HTML stuff. XD
Complicated indeed. *banging my head against the wall* XD
DeleteThank you.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pgD1ksDPts56-ZJ5_WLqjXSFv5eFnE2axC77AES4GlI/edit
Deletecommented first two pages by deRock because derp
Okay, first WALLS OF TEXT> please fix.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I'd suggest adding another pre-chapter (prequal?) to explain the DBZ world (I now nothing of it)
Almost no showing. that needs to be fixed. (Almost all tell.)
and... I'll be back later...
I think you should explain more, how much approx. would be considered a wall of text. And what ya mean by "show, don't tell." I was really confused when I first heard that phrase. XD In fact, I'm still not 100% sure what it means.
DeleteWriting a guide atm...
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