tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-49803631457725244162024-02-08T03:16:14.621-08:00SALTTo Serve to Aid to Love and to TolerateRavensDaggerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04616526489414641871noreply@blogger.comBlogger127125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-58434678330157058852013-05-05T16:20:00.000-07:002013-05-05T16:20:01.191-07:00The End<br />
Hello.<br />
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If you are reading this, you have probably been linked here expecting proof-reading or some other form of help with regards to your fanfiction.<br />
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I am afraid that we can no longer provide this service. Most of SALT's reviewing core has moved over to <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/group/197153/writers-and-reviewers-institute-for-technical-excellence">WRITE</a>, and so I would suggest contacting them for help first. Alternatively, /fic/ and TTG over on <a href="http://mlpchan.net/fic/">MLPChan</a> and <a href="http://www.ponychan.net/chan/fic/">Ponychan</a> provide an excellent reviewing service. Contact both or either. <br />
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As it is, SALT is considered to have ended from this day forwards. I will be closing off the submissions spreadsheet and replacing it with a link to this post.<br />
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Thank you, however, for your interest. Whether you're planing to get on to EQD or just want help to improve as a writer, I wish you all the best.<br />
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And good luck.<br />
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SALT is ending today, though it's been dead for a good while now.<br />
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Asking "why" and "why now" are both acceptable questions that I'll attempt to answer as briefly as possible. The first is because both reviewing and the Monthly Contests, the two integral parts of it, have been either inactive or unentered for a fair amount of time now. I dislike on principle letting things end with a whimper; I dislike even more not letting things end and just leaving a once occupied space to devolve into a ghost town without even ghosts.<br />
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SALT deserves an end over abandonment. I alone owe it that much.<br />
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The second question, the "why now", has an answer mildly more poetic. <a href="http://www.ponyfictionvault.net/">The Vault</a>, regularly touted as one of the "to be" places in pony fanfiction, is currently set to post, in series, a spin-off from a SALT competition fic, an-almost-but-not-quite SALT competition fic, and a story by one of our own reviewers.<br />
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Or in other words, we get to end on some strange form of a bang, and do so before any interest from this coincidence, as unlikely as it may be, settles on a SALT unable to handle it.<br />
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Moving onwards, I'd like to thank certain people for helping out with SALT over its time in existence. I have not compiled a tally of every single review ever given, so forgive me if any names were missed. Additionally, I was not present during the formation of SALT from BROHOOF, and so I may have missed even more.<br />
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I apologise for any accidental omissions now, and ask that you contact me through <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Aquillo">FimFiction</a> in order to rectify them. Or in the comments below. Either is fine.<br />
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And in a particular order without ranking or significance, thanks go to <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/ravensdagger">Ravensdagger</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/cheezesauce">Cheezesauce</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Burraku_Pansa">Burraku_Pansa</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/OtterMatt">OtterMatt</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Aquillo">Aquillo</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Firebirdbtops">Firebirdbtops</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Frederick%20the%20Saiyan">Fredick the Saiyan</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Nagagon">Nagagon</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Puppo530">Puppo530</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/D%20G%20D%20Davidson">DGDDavidson</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/NobleQuickSilver">NobleQuickSilver</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Blazewing">Blazewing</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Bombedrumbum">Bombedrumbum</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/MillennialDan">Millennial Dan</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Dublio">Dublio</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/MyBoyJ">MyBoyJ</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/TheWattsMan">TheWattsMan</a>, <a href="https://www.fimfiction.net/user/ZeroHero">ZeroHero</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Chromosome">Chromosome</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Arcainum">Arcainum</a>, <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/augiedog">AugieDog</a>, and <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Melon+Hunter">Melon Hunter</a>.<br />
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Thank you for helping make SALT a possibility, both through reviewing and participating in the contests. I know it's helped me grow as a writer in ways that would not have been possible without, and I'm certain it has helped others similarly.<br />
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It's been an honour, guys. Feel free to use the comments below to tell me how sappy I'm being.<br />
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Yours,<br />
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Aquillo<br />
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<br />Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com4tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-24407866200783918092012-12-02T13:56:00.000-08:002012-12-02T13:56:52.324-08:00In Their Highnesses' Clandestine Corps :: Acts I-IIIAuthor's name :: AugieDog<br />
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Links :: <br />
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<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1spFMKHHQJYpITP-GDjSIv-BoLXC-qqIuqSA6rZ8vaFA/edit">Act I</a><br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1V02DSIDqYWREnRQiDWuPEii0nkGA6aFsxNrfsh8HL1M/edit">Act II</a><br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1RfDMf1Ul0muri-Glp8ulkdU3DD1gfTvuJezqo2KRDE0/edit">Act III</a><br />
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Genre :: Romance/Adventure<br />
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Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD; Are the sentences too convoluted?<br />
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Anything Else :: The story's gotten two strikes from the EqD pre-readers already due in large part to my love of overly complicated grammatical structures. Sunset Read over in FimFiction's "EQD Rejects" group suggested I try posting it here as part of my current revision regimen.<br />
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Thanks!<br />
Mike<br />
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Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-11890902288294928472012-11-27T15:36:00.001-08:002012-11-27T15:36:42.917-08:00Rarity Has a Heart Attack [Working Title] :: Chp 1Author's name :: Burraku_Pansa<br />
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The Link :: <a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BCA5XfNIAwDUDq0yzbxeWu0Ywfz25wCuD7evGWh7eL8/edit">Chapter One</a><br />
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Genre :: Tragedy, Romance<br />
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Critique requested :: Grammar and internal consistency/consistency with <br />
the show; Style, characterisation, themes and plot (not that kind)<br />
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Anything Else :: Other than a basic looking-over-and-telling-me-what-you-think, I could really use another set of eyes for the tense. It's a first-person story told as though the character is recalling memories, and should be consistent with that, but I find myself getting muddled with all of the "had"s and whatnot. Any other problems you find, feel free to point them out, of course.<br />
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Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com3tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-23301579857914775982012-11-26T16:45:00.001-08:002012-11-26T16:45:22.795-08:00Touched By An Angel :: Chp 1Author's name :: Lamealot<br />
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The Link :: <a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Vzv8y47CusakVht_VJGUWfBuRZHP7fiiV2oAnmBDj-Y/edit">Chapter One</a><br />
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Critique requested :: Basic spelling, punctuation and format run through; Grammar and internal consistency/consistency with the show; Style, characterisation, themes and plot (not that kind)<br />
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Genre :: Sad<br />
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Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-8772030733353561382012-11-11T18:10:00.001-08:002012-11-11T18:11:10.148-08:00Twilight's Odyssey :: Chp 1Author's name :: DemPonies<br />
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The Link :: <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/story/24518/Twilight%27s-Odyssey">http://www.fimfiction.net/story/24518/Twilight%27s-Odyssey</a><br />
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Genre :: Alternate Universe, Adventure<br />
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Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD, Style, <br />
characterisation, themes and plot (not that kind)<br />
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Anything Else :: This is an Alternate Universe fic set in an Equestria <br />
where Discord never ruled and Luna & Celestia never came to power.<br />
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I hope to get this story into EQD.<br />
Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-42684588143186854342012-11-11T17:31:00.005-08:002012-11-11T17:31:42.346-08:00The Powers That Be :: Chp 1Author's name :: OtterMatt<br />
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The Link :: <a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1o7WQrkZLQ0ZPbAu3XYzJNtD1v-X9Gn9gx7gnDpCUgbI/edit">Chapter One</a><br />
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Genre :: Adventure<br />
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Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD<br />
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Anything Else :: This story is already pretty good, at least as my stories go. I'm very proud of it so far, but I want this thing to be perfect. I want to submit it to EqD when I release chapter 2, and I've got a feeling that with some TLC, it could be my second story to get accepted. <br />
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The main thing I've heard most so far is pacing. I need someone to point out places where the story is too quick and where it could use expanding. Fair warning: thar be headcanon ahead! I'll bet you've probably never read a Tia/Luna story like this before.<br />
Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-56374296937932517012012-10-30T15:48:00.000-07:002012-10-30T15:48:41.266-07:00SALT News: Merger Round TwoI think we've reached the point at which everyone's had their say on the merger in the previous post. I also don't think it's particularly polite to keep TWE waiting whilst we slowly debate this back & forth, so I'm moving this along into the counter-proposal stage.<br />
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I'll post what I think our counter-proposal should be in the comments down below; keep in mind that it's my view, not SALT's. How we vote is something that also needs to be settled: a vote counter on the blog's sides could be arranged; whether or not we use <a href="http://saltblock.blogspot.co.uk/2012/01/echo.html">ECHO</a> for it's also something that should be decided. I'll leave that up to whatever proposal I see getting repeated the most. <br />
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One final thing: In the previous thread, it seems like there's a large amount of confusion over what SALT does and what, exactly, editing is. I am going to state this as clearly as I can, so I can only apologise if this causes more debates/confusion.<br />
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SALT does not edit; SAlT has never edited. /fic/ does not edit. TWE do not edit (individual members occasionally do; the group's aims are not, however, angled towards it). There is, as of this date, no major* editing site within the fandom. The second proposal is, essentially, a proposal to create the first. <br />
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What /fic/, SALT and TWE do is a mixture of author-centric reviews and proof reading. An author-centric review points out flaws with the story, either grammatical or to do with the story itself. It suggest improvements for the story or areas which could be tightened. And that is it: the reviewer has no commitment to a follow-up review or to even clarify what they mean to the author. Most do, because people who are reviewing for free are generally nice like that. But -- just as there are reviewees who never respond -- there are reviewers who never respond. Editing is an entirely different beast.<br />
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Editing involves near constant interaction with the author. It is, in essence, one step down from being the author themselves: you are involved in every aspect of the story other than actually writing it. It is not -- and I stress this with a meta repetition -- not something to be taken on lightly.<br />
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And that's that. Oh, and in the interest of not being swayed by my opinion (I am just that charismatic, you see) please write out your proposal before reading the comments section. <br />
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*Our fandom being what it is, there are, of course, some. <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/index.php?view=group&group=1479">Here</a> is one of them. It seems dead to me, though YMMV.<br />
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Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com25tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-64661499093557584342012-10-28T12:51:00.002-07:002012-10-28T12:54:19.716-07:00SALT News: Merger DiscussionI've already contacted most of SALT about this, but on the off chance I've missed someone (sorry), here's a quick run down and a <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/80526">link</a> towards relevant reading material.<br />
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Essentially, there has been a proposal towards merging SALT and <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/index.php?view=group&group=1340">TWE</a>, or Train-Wreck Explorers. The actual proposal from TWE is placed below. Your opinion on how we respond to this should be posted below; I would also be grateful if we could avoid trying to convince or sway other people's opinions. <br />
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A few members mentioned that they weren't sure what, exactly, the <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/index.php?view=group&group=1340">TWE</a> are. The link on their name takes you to the group, where you should be able to gather an opinion on them.<br />
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I would like to stress that this has been initiated by both groups; this is not a case of one group wanting to take over another. Both Ravens and Csquared08 -- essentially, the (co)founders of both groups -- were involved in this issue's formation. <br />
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Here is the proposal itself, as sent from Csquared08 to me:<br />
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<i>So, we talked about the whole SALT-TWE merger on Skype for a bit. A lot of ideas were brought up, and just as many were shut down. And nearly every Admin was there, so this is coming from all of us.<br />
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Anywho, this is the basic idea of what we're proposing:<br />
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We're going to do a full merge with SALT. They're all going to join us and such. We will then have a second group for mentoring purposes run mostly by the old SALT guys and any of our guys that want to try mentoring. There will be clear links and such to the second group.<br />
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Now, that's incredibly basic, so I'll expand on that for a bit.<br />
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Idea the first: We're going to do a full merge with SALT. They're all going to join us and such.<br />
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This is pretty simple. You all find the TWE homepage and click the "Join Group" button. However, joining the group brings no obligations you in of itself. If the SALT Admins/leadership wishes to retain some sense of authority, we'll be fine with adding you as Admins/Mods. We can work the specifics out later, but I figured it was worth mentioning that we're open to that idea. Now, as for other things within the group, there's the matter of being an approved reviewer. Preferably, if we're gonna add you to the list on the front page, we'd like to see how you handle reviewing something truly awful. If that's not something you want to do, that's perfectly fine. Don't worry about it. That's all up to you. Just do keep in mind that we prefer to have our Admins and Mods active within the group in some way.<br />
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Idea the second: We will then have a second group for mentoring purposes run mostly by the old SALT guys and any of our guys that want to try mentoring.<br />
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Now this is the real meat and potatoes of the proposal.<br />
So, a bit of background first. The TWE is a group that is dedicated to finding the terrible fanfics published on a daily basis and give a review to the author explaining in varying amounts of detail just how bad the story is. Most of the time, the reviews are fairly lengthy and deal with many of the structural problems in the story. From that point, we're done with the story unless the author comes to us asking for additional help. We are not there to mentor the author the whole way through the writing process.<br />
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Additionally, there is also this thread in which anyone can ask for a review of their story, good or bad. Now, I honestly have no idea how well this is maintained, which is a problem in of itself. This is one thing we're not particularly organized about, and we should work on that.<br />
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That's where you guys and the second group come in. The second group (we'll call it the "Engineers" right now for simplicity's sake; the name, of course, is subject to change pending further discussion) is where we deal with authors like those in the above thread. This is a private group where membership is by invite only. So the goal of the Engineers would be to mentor authors and work with them one-on-one. As far as I know, that's what you guys at SALT try to do.<br />
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So that's the key difference here. The Explorers find the fics, the approved reviewers give off a nice long review, and that's that. Interested authors (either from a horrible story we've reviewed or a member looking to improve his story) are then pointed to the Engineers. Somehow, however the management over at the Engineers decides to do it, the interested author expresses his interest to have his story reviewed one-on-one by a mentor. A mentor then claims the author, and the matter is then handled from there by the mentor. Now, obviously there will need to be a way to make sure other mentors know an author is already claimed so that an author isn't flooded with people looking to provide one-on-one help. But that starts to go into how the management of the Engineers decides to run things which isn't exactly relevant to the proposal itself. The kinks can be worked out in due time.<br />
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So there's also the matter of how mentors are acquired/approved. Much like our reviewer application thread, we will have a thread where people apply to become a mentor (and thus join the Engineers as well. Remember, that's a private group that's invite-only so that only approved mentors are there and maybe one or two guys for group management purposes, like me). However, unlike our reviewer application thread, the mentor approval process will be much more strict. Only the best of the best will be approved (I imagine one of you guys will do the approving).<br />
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Of course, picking up an author is entirely up to each individual mentor. If one mentor doesn't want to deal with a particular subject, then he/she can just as easily let another mentor take care of it. But I digress. These are all details that can be dealt with later. The point is, mentors have a choice in who and what they take on as "students."<br />
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So if all of that makes sense, you guys at SALT who don't want to deal terrible train wrecks don't have to. You can keep doing what you're doing, but in what is hopefully a more organized and streamlined manner.<br />
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Also, another small matter is sending over some of our Admins over to the Engineers. Just like we're open to the idea of you guys coming in with administrative roles, we trust you'd be open to the same idea. Of course, as I said before, specifics can be worked out later, but I thought this was another thing worth mentioning.<br />
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And finally, idea the third: There will be clear links and such to the second group.<br />
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This is quite simple. To make things easy for everyone, there will be a clearly marked mentor application thread. There will also be a thread with a link to the Engineers that explains just exactly what's going on with the engineers. In case you haven't noticed, we have a nice big, bold, blue link on the front page to a "Required Reading" thread with links to lots of things every Explorer should at least be aware of. This is our solution to the lack of stickies and should hopefully be adequate in making members aware of the Engineers and the services they provide.<br />
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As far as I can tell, this covers all aspects of the proposal and should make things fairly clear on what we're looking for in a possible merger.<br />
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Cheers! </i> <br />
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Opinions below, please. I will probably be a bit delayed on mine. <br />
Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com28tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-45444084238057915052012-10-28T12:19:00.001-07:002012-10-28T12:19:35.296-07:00Creepy Pasta: Return of HarmonyAuthor's name :: Sayer<br />
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Mature Themes :: Gore<br />
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The Link :: <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/story/59687/Creepy-Pasta%3A-Return-of-Harmony">Chapter one</a><br />
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Genre :: Grimdark, sad, human<br />
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Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD; Basic spelling, punctuation and format run through; Grammar and internal consistency/consistency with the show<br />
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Anything Else :: A creepy pasta about a guy watching a video that contains an alternate ending where Discord ends, quickly escalating into something far worse and scarier than he thought.<br />
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Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com4tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-90812165731399889522012-10-27T06:19:00.003-07:002012-10-27T06:19:32.436-07:00Draconequus :: Chapters Seven (+rest)Author's name :: cheezesauce<br />
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The Link :: <a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vJUUiDHlJRmhpWJipEy2M6vxnHV_6Em_WzK6wHdCcUk/edit">Chapter Seven</a><br />
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Genre :: [Dark]<br />
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Anything Else :: It'll be awesome if you guys could read through the whole story and tell me if I've done the plot well. If not, here's chapter 7.<br />
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Critique requested :: Basic spelling, punctuation and format run through; Style, characterisation, themes and plot (not that kind)<br />
Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-71273286190646139542012-10-27T06:17:00.000-07:002012-10-27T07:01:23.617-07:00Was Being Evil Always So Hard? :: Chapter One.Author's name :: N64Fan<br />
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The Link :: <a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1n9PBk6v6iiaOA7SkY-N5aISXTpYRcems1sM-mTJXC1s/edit">Chapter One</a><br />
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Genre :: Human<br />
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Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD; Style, characterisation, themes and plot (not that kind)<br />
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Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-84975500450469103782012-10-23T18:00:00.003-07:002012-10-23T18:00:55.063-07:00The Other Princess :: Chapter OneAuthor's name :: Aquillo<br />
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The Link :: <br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1laakSj6hklmtqf4T9lAR45U18BSOqE_ueOKMh6qUfbM/edit">Chapter One</a><br />
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Genre :: AU<br />
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Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD; Style, characterisation, themes and plot (not that kind)<br />
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Anything Else :: There's a section with a link to a video in it. I'd like to know whether or not the note at the story's start does a good enough job of explaining it + overall reactions to the video. I'll admit that it's highly experimental, and was certainly something of a challenge to work in convincingly.<br />
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I'd also like to know people's general impressions, because, well, feedback :P<br />
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Notes :: Yes, this is one of mine. Yes, this means SALT is now corrupt.<br />
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Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-73078344022933500412012-10-20T18:07:00.002-07:002012-10-20T18:07:30.505-07:00*Untitled* - one shotAuthor's name :: OtterMatt<br />
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The Link :: <a href="https://docs.google.com/folder/d/0B7-2PTNL9uTvZVYxM0EyOERuQzQ/edit?docId=1PbuFUUeR3XFnVrSI7vNGznBSNUcNt4ZkNkyEfTPlk8A">Chapter One</a><br />
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Genre :: Big ol' Slice O' Life<br />
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Critique requested :: Basic spelling, punctuation and format run through; Style, characterisation, themes and plot (not that kind)<br />
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Anything Else :: So far, this fic has struggled with not having much of a point. I know it's just a SoL type of thing, but I'd like to know if it's capable of holding its own weight, so to speak.<br />
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Also, I need a title. Any suggestions would be appreciated.<br />
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Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-3836434710507898802012-10-20T18:06:00.000-07:002012-10-20T18:06:01.810-07:00Dreams of Las PegasusAuthor's name :: OtterMatt<br />
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The Link :: <a href="https://docs.google.com/folder/d/0B7-2PTNL9uTvZVYxM0EyOERuQzQ/edit?docId=0B7-2PTNL9uTvRFdjZjJQajdsZjg">Chapter One</a><br />
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Genre :: Adventure, SoL<br />
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Critique requested :: Basic spelling, punctuation and format run through; Grammar and internal consistency/consistency with the show; Style, characterisation, themes and plot (not that kind)<br />
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Anything Else :: One chapter so far, based on the Practice SALT #4 - Rainbow Dash gets shipped.<br />
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It's a working title, feel free to suggest a new one.<br />
<br />
The link is to the project folder. If for some reason that doesn't work, <br />
email me at DaOtter@gmail and I'll fix it up for ya.<br />
Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-12671137919264265312012-10-20T18:03:00.001-07:002012-10-20T18:07:58.900-07:00The Cold Streets of CanterlotAuthor's name :: Antaeus<br />
<br />
The Link :: <a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1J0krVn0zt592jgvObDdeebXc1LTxOLLEZptZNAj1a5Q/edit">Chapter One</a><br />
<br />
Genre :: Sad, dark.<br />
<br />
Anything Else :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD; Basic spelling, punctuation and format run through <br />
<br />
Notes :: This is really late to be posted, mainly because I was ill at the time and my email sorts anything from the SALT submission into junk because reasons. Apologies to Antaeus for this. <br />
Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-86773137000458689632012-10-11T04:14:00.001-07:002012-10-11T04:14:11.086-07:00Twilight's Odyssey : Pro. + chp. 1Author's name :: DemPonies<br />
<br />
The Link :: <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/story/24518/Twilight%27s-Odyssey">http://www.fimfiction.net/story/24518/Twilight%27s-Odyssey</a><br />
<br />
Genre :: Alternate Universe, Adventure<br />
<br />
Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD, Style, <br />
characterisation, themes and plot (not that kind)<br />
<br />
Anything Else :: This is an Alternate Universe fic set in an Equestria <br />
where Discord never ruled and Luna & Celestia never came to power.<br />
<br />
I hope to get this story into EQD.<br />
<br />
Number Of Distinct Docs Submitted :: 2Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-42133651369004581892012-10-08T10:13:00.003-07:002012-10-08T10:14:21.779-07:00Dim Bulbs Author's name :: Sunset Reed<br />
<br />
The Link :: <a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Uko18qNSw1gZO3KfpYUpylvGF2sFbPX0ZlyGA-0DJhA/edit">https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Uko18qNSw1gZO3KfpYUpylvGF2sFbPX0ZlyGA-0DJhA/edit</a><br />
<br />
Genre :: Comedy<br />
<br />
Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD; Basic <br />
spelling, punctuation and format run through; Grammar and internal <br />
consistency/consistency with the show; Style, characterisation, themes and <br />
plot (not that kind)<br />
<br />
Anything Else :: This is a slice-of-life comedy. The characters are written <br />
to match their canon counterparts, and when needed, their universally <br />
accepted fanon counterparts. Nothing should need explaining prior to <br />
reading this story.<br />
<br />
Number Of Distinct Docs Submitted :: 1<br />
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Notes :: Comments are now enabled + problems with previous doc sorted, so I'm re-posting this. Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-57816538137065915972012-10-07T17:53:00.000-07:002012-10-07T17:53:57.451-07:00To Glimpse a Wider World: Chp 4 (+1-3)Author's name :: Burraku_Pansa<br />
<br />
The Link :: <br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/a/cornell.edu/document/d/1cV-GaSa4rcZcm233qiJUZ48Bx8w2Lr8k7GcdPDEAakY/edit">Chapter one</a><br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/a/cornell.edu/document/d/1RuIVL2ZFIAel7mHfodFZjNrUn34IOazjWen8t14HDbI/edit">Chapter two</a> <br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/a/cornell.edu/document/d/1pSUJMXnzOqwypRukZUgARotnvyGgih-hZdHeWyPkIYo/edit">Chapter three</a><br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YQ9pILJx5OdA3_ban5sj8m8yZ-MdfP520fhA640xTSY/edit">Chapter four</a><br />
<br />
Genre :: Adventure, Light Comedy<br />
<br />
Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD; Basic <br />
spelling, punctuation and format run through; Style, characterisation, <br />
themes and plot (not that kind)<br />
<br />
Anything Else :: Tell me if this latest chapter works. It's formatted a bit <br />
differently than the first three were, with more frequent and drastic scene <br />
breaks. There aren't any un-narrated parts now, either.<br />
<br />
Oh, and on that note, the narration for the intro scenes of chapters two <br />
and three have still yet to be looked at, as far as I'm aware. If you could <br />
find the time to do so, I'd be grateful.<br />
<br />
Number Of Distinct Docs Submitted :: 4Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com1tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-70340575809071165512012-09-27T11:46:00.000-07:002012-09-27T11:46:29.485-07:00Stars & Stripes: Chp 1Author's name :: Wilgrove<br />
<br />
The Link :: <br />
<a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/story/53578/1/Stars-%26amp%3B-Stripes/Chapter-1%3A-Changes">http://www.fimfiction.net/story/53578/1/Stars-%26amp%3B-Stripes/Chapter-1%3A-Changes</a><br />
<br />
Genre :: Romance, Action, Sad<br />
<br />
Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD; Basic <br />
spelling, punctuation and format run through; Grammar and internal <br />
consistency/consistency with the show<br />
<br />
Anything Else :: The fic is pretty straight forth, I just need help on the <br />
grammar and the tense. How these things got past four different editors, I <br />
have no ruttin' clue, but there ya go.<br />
<br />
Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-43006623335845459312012-09-24T15:22:00.002-07:002012-09-24T15:22:51.786-07:00Number the Night: Chps 1-4Author's name :: YetAnotherBrony<br />
<br />
Links :: <a href="https://docs.google.com/a/g.clemson.edu/document/d/1eUEPr93KBp84wH1pfFlau0RHbTrB1e-Nz194XJJncto/edit">Chapter one</a><br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/17JToaPfyMO5DRHenneO8GTjZVCtYTGx3RueSV6MeLFs/edit">Chapter two</a><br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1V_891R0i4bAAPh1o3_pllitmOQQ4cKxUcZf5zjP4euY/edit">Chapter three</a><br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1EKcXuL6y5cYgLPm4zcyA5yvOKVn6JW0b5Ck6eYCqJWQ/edit">Chapter four</a><br />
<br />
Genre :: Sad, Slice of Life<br />
<br />
Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD; Basic <br />
spelling, punctuation and format run through; Grammar and internal <br />
consistency/consistency with the show; Style, characterisation, themes and <br />
plot (not that kind)<br />
<br />
Anything Else :: I have one strike on EQD already. Mind you there were only <br />
two chapters at the time so any comments are only about those two. Also I <br />
have tried to resolve all the following issues, but still I think you <br />
should be aware of what the pre-reader said.<br />
<br />
Pre-reader comments start... now!<br />
<br />
<i>will bare witness // Homophone confusion. You do this a few times.<br />
You’ve an issue with unwieldy adjectives and modifiers in general.<br />
Dialogue tagging mistakes. They’re sparse, but pay a keen eye to this.<br />
Avoid parenthesis. Go with commas or em dashes for appositive structuring.<br />
As a rule of thumb, spell out numbers.<br />
Don’t forget to capitalize titles when replacing a name.<br />
Commas before the name in direct address, always.<br />
<br />
Sequence with Discord is so rushed as to detract from the tale and break <br />
reader immersion.<br />
Luna not coming up with anything but ‘drill baby drill’ comes off a bit <br />
droll. Spice it up some; have her show some creativity.<br />
The final battle before banishment feels more than a bit rushed.<br />
<br />
In all, grammatical issues aside, what this comes down to is not the Luna <br />
you choose to portray, but the competence and consistency in which you do <br />
so. Shore this up, get some reviews, make sure you’ve got things smooth. <br />
This is strike one of three, revise wisely.</i><br />
<br />
Notes :: Anyone else amused by the pre-reader's unintentional pun? <br />
<br />
No? Just me?<br />
<br />
Ok.Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com3tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-88613176647309278892012-09-20T06:48:00.001-07:002012-09-20T10:15:14.312-07:00Twilight Sparkle: Patient 107497 -- Chp 1Author's name :: Golden Delicious<br />
<br />
The Link :: <a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1p-6XilenJE-6HyGpvbfRI9769IlCaP_w05lA7bywcv0/edit">Chapter one</a><br />
<br />
Genre :: Sad, AU<br />
<br />
Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD; Basic <br />
spelling, punctuation and format run through; Style, characterisation, <br />
themes and plot (not that kind); Making it more catchy<br />
<br />
Anything Else :: Yes, it has already been featured on FimFiction. I want to <br />
submit it to EqD before I finish it. It has a lot of pacing issues, so <br />
pointing those out won't help. Telling me how to fix it will.<br />
<br />
Thank you!<br />
<br />
Number Of Distinct Docs Submitted :: 1Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-20598773829235038392012-09-13T13:47:00.001-07:002012-09-13T13:48:01.634-07:00To Glimpse a Wider World: Chp 1-3Author's name :: Burraku_Pansa<br />
<br />
The Link :: <a href="https://docs.google.com/a/cornell.edu/document/d/1cV-GaSa4rcZcm233qiJUZ48Bx8w2Lr8k7GcdPDEAakY/edit">Chapter one</a><br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/a/cornell.edu/document/d/1RuIVL2ZFIAel7mHfodFZjNrUn34IOazjWen8t14HDbI/edit"> Chapter two</a><br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/a/cornell.edu/document/d/1pSUJMXnzOqwypRukZUgARotnvyGgih-hZdHeWyPkIYo/edit"> Chapter three</a><br />
<br />
Genre :: Adventure, Light Comedy<br />
<br />
Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD; Basic <br />
spelling, punctuation and format run through; Style, characterisation, <br />
themes and plot (not that kind).<br />
<br />
Anything Else :: The first thing you're likely to notice is that the <br />
beginning of every chapter is told through pure dialogue with no narration. <br />
This is purposeful, and is supposed to give the sense of the intro events <br />
taking place far off and inconsequentially, with the characters as little <br />
more than voices in the dark. In these areas in particular, I would like to <br />
be told if, at any point, the characterization or context is too weak for <br />
you to be able to tell who is speaking.<br />
<br />
Beyond that, in the 'normal' parts of the story, I'd like to hear what <br />
needs work, and what you think I've done well. Thank you in advance for <br />
your time.<br />
<br />
Number Of Distinct Docs Submitted :: 3<br />
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Notes :: Don't worry. The links are to Gdocs. I'm just getting tired of the messiness of linking a link.Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-45544535664857627982012-09-09T07:35:00.002-07:002012-09-09T07:35:55.415-07:00The Social Experiment: chp 1Author's name :: OtterMatt<br />
<br />
The Link :: <br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/folder/d/0B7-2PTNL9uTvLW9pSURQUXZqems/edit?forcehl=1&hl=en&docId=1h0usv2qQJuZrBLbNWDFyvLEfCxPm8v7cLkqDmoNAUMs">https://docs.google.com/folder/d/0B7-2PTNL9uTvLW9pSURQUXZqems/edit?forcehl=1&hl=en&docId=1h0usv2qQJuZrBLbNWDFyvLEfCxPm8v7cLkqDmoNAUMs</a><br />
<br />
Genre :: Sad, Romance<br />
<br />
Critique requested :: Style, characterisation, themes and plot (not that <br />
kind); Flow and extra expansion<br />
<br />
Anything Else :: I have a working story here, but I think it probably needs <br />
about another thousand words of extra... um... stuff added to make it <br />
stronger. Please let me know how it flows, and where it could use some <br />
extra help.<br />
<br />
Editing and grammar not needed, I already have an editor for the technical <br />
aspects.<br />
<br />
Number Of Distinct Docs Submitted :: 2<br />
Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com1tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-89060386095552297922012-09-01T14:31:00.000-07:002012-09-01T14:33:12.194-07:00SALT Monthly Contest: We missed a month edition.<div class="separator" style="clear: both; text-align: center;"><a href="http://cdn.derpiboo.ru/thumbs/1309/661/2012/08/13/22_36_20_716_73940__UNOPT__" imageanchor="1" style="margin-left:1em; margin-right:1em"><img border="0" height="350" width="395" src="http://cdn.derpiboo.ru/thumbs/1309/661/2012/08/13/22_36_20_716_73940__UNOPT__" /></a></div><br />
Uploading here last because <strike>I'm lazy</strike> I've been busy.<br />
<br />
Prompt this time round is Out Of Time. <br />
<br />
Huge thanks to *adamscage for being a-okay with us using his image. <br />
<br />
Rules follow the usual: submit a fic either here or in the <a href="http://www.fimfiction.net/index.php?view=group&group=936&thread=4291">relevant thread on the archive</a>, get it edited by everyone, help out by giving crit on the other entries and then proceed to publish it on Fimfic. <br />
<br />
Questions? Ask and I'll answer them.<br />
<br />
<br />
Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com1tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4980363145772524416.post-16521051124267575352012-08-31T12:52:00.005-07:002012-08-31T12:52:39.753-07:00From Scratch : Author's name :: Kaldanor<br />
<br />
The Links :: <br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uVKlRd2_Q0UkS62aADWigKVAmF8z6wkiY9THa1MXyqY/edit">https://docs.google.com/document/d/1uVKlRd2_Q0UkS62aADWigKVAmF8z6wkiY9THa1MXyqY/edit </a><br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1O4GKWaPw1nPKGMpwwZZFBy3qLFEt-S_qByqfXIFm_no/edit">https://docs.google.com/document/d/1O4GKWaPw1nPKGMpwwZZFBy3qLFEt-S_qByqfXIFm_no/edit </a><br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/16oEi9ucC31F4SOAW1QU97iot2Xmh59T_9MjPkSPR85M/edit">https://docs.google.com/document/d/16oEi9ucC31F4SOAW1QU97iot2Xmh59T_9MjPkSPR85M/edit</a> <br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1t4PNnakExesn4rXY1l0I8KSSJTYKEh1Xem5pp2G01EY/edit">https://docs.google.com/document/d/1t4PNnakExesn4rXY1l0I8KSSJTYKEh1Xem5pp2G01EY/edit</a> <br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1xfIaeKwDzPE8ZEF2UTH023-N25rM8KSIs7WLUY0pvCQ/edit">https://docs.google.com/document/d/1xfIaeKwDzPE8ZEF2UTH023-N25rM8KSIs7WLUY0pvCQ/edit</a> <br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1KY34-b66BkLywn2YwZin8hCyXCJBmkghRjnFDgeegYI/edit">https://docs.google.com/document/d/1KY34-b66BkLywn2YwZin8hCyXCJBmkghRjnFDgeegYI/edit</a> <br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BPN98iNN7CQHNTeg60vGHxZK1muNrlq1p5kGvAWRbIQ/edit">https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BPN98iNN7CQHNTeg60vGHxZK1muNrlq1p5kGvAWRbIQ/edit</a> <br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/1mcaXxIf3rlYrEWi8TjnueBBqxtAZLzUTAJh4cTJcj1k/edit">https://docs.google.com/document/d/1mcaXxIf3rlYrEWi8TjnueBBqxtAZLzUTAJh4cTJcj1k/edit</a> <br />
<a href="https://docs.google.com/document/d/18URHGTrTeGk8BWh5NPqUcbjSF4sxjiIP3DCArBjZx98/edit">https://docs.google.com/document/d/18URHGTrTeGk8BWh5NPqUcbjSF4sxjiIP3DCArBjZx98/edit</a><br />
<br />
Genre :: Shipping, Normal<br />
<br />
Critique requested :: Opinion on likelihood of getting to EQD; Basic <br />
spelling, punctuation and format run through; Grammar and internal <br />
consistency/consistency with the show; Style, characterisation, themes and <br />
plot (not that kind)<br />
<br />
Anything Else :: The first chapter uses some deceptive story telling <br />
tactics. Plot holes are likely not actually plot holes. I've had a literal <br />
adventure in finding editors for this story so far. This means I've had a <br />
large turnover for a large amount of reasons, therefore the style can kind <br />
of shift. The first chapter was most recently rewritten from the ground up <br />
and will need the most help. Past that trying to make sure the chapters <br />
feel like they're part of the same story, and basic editing would be nice. <br />
No matter how many editors I go through it seems that more errors get found.<br />
<br />
Number Of Distinct Docs Submitted :: 9Aquillohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07089426692416104195noreply@blogger.com0